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                              I will grip you by my armsbreadth
                                                        as you just beg i n   t o    f  a   d    e      ;

                              I'll preserve you by the handfulls
                                                       as you swiftly s
                                                                           e
                                                                           e
                                                                            p
away;
                              I'll reduce you to a syrup,
                                                       that your essence concentrates;

                              'till your gaze is unfamiliar
                                                       and your smiles are b l u r r e d and s t r a n g e

                              'till your scent is duly noted
                                                       and your name is  t i n g e d  with grey

                              'till you're shrunk to mere sensations,
                                                       'till your voice won't r e s o n a t e


                         Until all of the spice I loved you for
                                                                      is honeyed bland and  v a  g    u     e    .      .       .





                                                                                                                                               .
©2007-2009 ~Alimari
:iconalimari:

Author's Comments

I may or may not rewrite this at some point.

A fare thee well for the memories we are doomed to forget.








I will miss you.

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:iconyellowsocks:
Wow, that's really good! I love how the structure kinda makes the words slow down in your mind too. (I'm the kind of person who imagines someone reading... whatever I read. :O )

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Ha ha FEAR ME! I am the faver of FAVES! Aka TEH YELLOW FAVER!!!!! I SHALL FAVE ALL YOUR ART! XD
:iconshinji-complex:
This is probably the best thing I have read in months.

It's just so...perfect. The rhythm, the meter, it flows so well.

<3 I love you. Teach me.

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Two-headed boy, she is all you could need
She will feed you tomatos and radio wires
And retire to sheets safe and clean
But don't hate her when she gets up to leave
:iconbvbg:
Very well made, pretty dark, I like it. I enjoy the structure of how this is written, the word fade fade's away and such.
I find it interesting that both our poems are side by side in the romance fixed category and both have sweet in the name.
:iconalimari:
I was hoping it would
:iconalimari:
it wasn't planned, honest to god. I just felt I needed to write something, and I said "Fine! No feeling-sorry-for-myself poems anymore! Pick a topic." and I picked forgetting, because I'm gonna be doing a lot of that soon.

I'm glad it flows.
:iconalimari:
thats an amusing coincidence.

and thanks
:iconmantrith:
this is sooo cool :D

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